After taking a few weeks off, I am back to Write on Wednesdays! I hopefully will be able to make up some of the prompts that I missed, but in the meantime, I will try to just keep up. :)
This week’s write on Wednesday uses the words of Emily Dickinson as the prompt. What a tough act to follow! But here goes:
Write On Wednesdays Exercise 19 - Sunshine in a cup. Write the words of Emily Dickinson: "Bring me sunshine in a cup" at the top of your page. Set a timer for 5 minutes. Write the first words that come into your head after the prompt. Don't take you pen off the page (or fingers off the keyboard). Stop only when the buzzer rings! Do this exercise over and over if you wish. Write beyond 5 minutes if you like, you can link it up as an extra post.
“Bring me sunshine in a cup.”
“What do you say?”
“Please. Please bring me sunshine in a cup, Mommy.”
Karly turned away from her young daughter and walked the couple paces to the fridge. She pulled open the door and stuck her hand inside, reaching for the giant jug of orange juice. She smiled as she glanced at the label – Sunny D. Since the first time she had told Marissa that the orange juice was a brand called Sunny D, Marissa had always called it sunshine. Whether by mistake or intent, Karly wasn’t quite sure but she loved it nonetheless.
Karly grabbed Marissa’s my little pony cup out of the cupboard and placed it on the counter. She poured the orange juice, filling the cup about half way. She twisted the lid back onto the orange juice. The last time she had failed to do that immediately after pour, half of the juice ended up on the floor and the furniture and the walls.
Karly walked around the island to where Marissa was sitting on the other side. She leaned down and kissed Marissa’s head as she placed the cup in front of her. “A little sunshine for my little sunshine” she whispered in Marissa’s ear.
I thought of this idea as soon as I read the prompt. I am not even sure what sparked it, because I don’t even drink Sunny D! But I think it turned out ok. I might choose this one in the future to clean up or add to a little bit.
Taking time off from writing takes gumption, but returning to it takes more!
That was very fun to read. I loved the originality, a little girl who thinks that Sunny D is sunshine. It was adorable, it flowed well, and the ending just made me want to go "Awwwwww" because it was so cute. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI love how Sunny D was the sunshine in the cup. Great piece!
ReplyDeletenice imagery, making a day to day happening become special.
ReplyDeleteI think this was a really sweet story.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I would say is that I would substitute using actual names quite as often ie, replace Karly or Marissa in a couple places with she or her. I think it would possibly read a little better if you did that.
That was really sweet :)
ReplyDeleteLOL, I immediately thought of orange juice as well! It's all those adds of people sitting outside at breakfast time with the sun sparkling over their bowls and cups! What a lovely moment between mother and child! I remember thinking just the same thoughts about my children calling milk "Moo juice"!
ReplyDeleteGreat take on the prompt! Really precious story.
ReplyDeleteI love finding stories in the day to day. Lovely. I agree with Sarah and think you could try getting rid of the names in places, perhaps even try writing the piece without names altogether? Not sure why, but I'd be interested to see how this alters the piece.
ReplyDeleteWelcome back!